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meatballsbonanza t1_jbpbwij wrote

Congrats! Stringing together enough words to constitute a novel is an epic task. You should be proud.

I had a look at the blurb at goodreads and I think you should consider simplifying the language. I had to read the first sentence a few times before I understood it. No good having readers give up even before they open the book.

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Kristofmorrow OP t1_jbpc50q wrote

I did change it but Goodreads takes longer to get its summaries from Amazon I guess

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tobiasvl t1_jbpqcn8 wrote

I actually don't think Goodreads automatically updated blurbs when Amazon does. On the other hand, Goodreads is crowd sourced, although you need to be a "Librarian" to edit stuff (just something you apply for). I'm a Librarian so I can update it manually if you want me to.

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Kristofmorrow OP t1_jbpqy2v wrote

Haha that’s amazing yes thank you

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tobiasvl t1_jbpt0me wrote

OK, done. BTW, I see that the shorter description is only for Volume I on Amazon, the combined Vol I & II still has the longer one. Maybe that's intentional? There's something weird on Goodreads though - Volume I is there as a separate book, but it's 499 pages long, while Vol I & II is 421 pages...

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Yarusenai t1_jbpk6yt wrote

I think the same about the excerpt he wrote further up. It's unnecessarily verbose, so much that it really restricts the flow. He does say it's like that the entire time, which would turn me off immediately, but I am probably not the target audience. Good luck in either case!

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Sovereign444 t1_jbpkwrd wrote

I agree, I mean I hate to be a spoilsport and I’m happy for him, but it seems unnecessarily overly complicated.

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Kristofmorrow OP t1_jbplkxz wrote

It was written for those who love writers like Dickens and I appreciate your thoughtful words. Though what I wrote further up about Still Morrow is not a summary, it’s an excerpt from the book.

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Yarusenai t1_jbpulpa wrote

Yes, that's what I meant; the excerpt. I corrected that.

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Kristofmorrow OP t1_jbpcghp wrote

“An adventure, charming and whole that seeks to enlighten, to hearten, to soothe and to even frighten the reader when made to contemplate our capacity for good and evil and indifference.”

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demisemihemiwit t1_jbpms4t wrote

Split infinitive. I'm out.

Just busting chops! I'll never have anything but respect for artists with the focus and drive to finish such a huge task. Congratulations!

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