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Blu_Spirit t1_j8uqrwe wrote

Again nature sleeps,

Blanketed by freezing winds

Waiting for morning.

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Awakening dirt

Roots stretching, leaves unfurl

Reaching for the sun.

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Summer sun rises

Heat spreads from wildfires

Earth begins to thirst

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Autumn rain-storms flood

Under thundering gray skies

Nature drinks her fill

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Tired, she slumbers,

Under a blanket of snow

the cycle repeats.

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One year at a time.

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RecklessSpeculation t1_j8yzsj6 wrote

You do a lot with little here, and I appreciate that. The depictions of winter and spring convey their seasons effortlessly.

I would offer that "Autumn rain storms flood" is somewhat clunky in that it has two interpretations for a reader: "Autumn rain storms flood" with rainstorms as the subject and flood as the verb or "Autumn rain storms flood" with rain as the subject and storms as the verb and then flood just kinda lying there at the end.

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