Viewing a single comment thread. View all comments

RecklessSpeculation t1_j8yytjj wrote

Reply to comment by eigen-dog in [OT] Poetry Corner: Fire! by OldBayJ

Good Stygian theme throughout, first two stanzas really give a sense of sulfur and decay. Sets up nicely for the introduction of the Styx. Love "Old Charon's seat" as almost punctuation.

Only edit I would offer would be consider the repeat of "blackened" in the first two lines. blackened cracks doesn't add much to blackened rock and vice versa.

1