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andrius-b t1_jahwh9a wrote

I leaned toward the mirror, inspecting my face under the harsh bathroom lights. Ever since Olivia had half-jokingly said that I wasn't aging, the thought kept niggling at me. My power wasn't immortality—it was immunity to others. If I was indeed not aging, the conclusion that followed seemed too ridiculous to pursue.

A clang from the living room made me frown; I lived alone and wasn't expecting guests. Stepping out of the bathroom, I killed the lights and walked warily toward the source of the noise.

Stepping through the doorway, I did a double-take. Before the ajar window stood a well-built, sharply dressed man with a handsome face everyone on the planet knew. My momentary panic was quickly replaced by giddy excitement.

"Holy shit," I exclaimed. "Universal Man? What are you doing here?"

He smiled, but it didn't reach his icy blue eyes. "Have a seat, Tom. We have a lot to talk about."

I hurried to the couch and sat down, not even questioning his ordering me around in my own home, or wondering how he knew my name. "Let me just say, it's an honor—"

He raised his palm as if to silence me, and a frown crossed his face. "So it's true."

"What is?" I asked, bemused.

"Your power—it blocks others. How... irritating." Shaking his head, he reached into his jacket. "Well, no matter. I read your friend's memories so I came prepared."

"My friend?"

He drew a gun, and I froze, more stunned than scared. Universal Man could crush concrete and lift cars without breaking a sweat. What would he want with a puny little pistol?

"What's going on?" I laughed nervously. "This is a joke, right?"

"For what it's worth, I'm sorry." The gun sat awkwardly in his hand as he leveled it at my chest. "I never encountered anyone like you before. I never would've even known, had I not picked up your friend's thoughts. You're far too dangerous to be left alive."

I swallowed. "Olivia? What did you do to her?"

"I merely ensured she wouldn't remember the past few days. Much easier to deal with than you."

"I don't understand," I said in a trembling voice. "How am I dangerous? My power's so minor they gave it the lowest classification—"

He laughed, a high, chilling sound. "The idiots. Tell me, why do you think I have all these abilities?"

"Y-you're special, everyone knows that. The pinnacle of human evolution..."

"A convenient excuse. One power per person; the rule hasn't changed for millennia." He glanced down at his other hand and clenched a fist. "Mine is to take from others. Their powers, even their lifespan. Take from everyone... except, it seems, you."

"The whole world is growing old because of you?" I exclaimed, half-rising from my seat. "That's absurd! People have been dying for ages—"

His face rippled, shifting to another man's, then a woman's, his body following suit. "How long—do you think—I have lived?" asked an ever-changing voice.

I laughed because the truth was too much to bear. Gunshots rang loudly in my ears, and my chest suddenly burned. I slumped back, my eyes bulging out as I found myself unable to draw breath. The monster's icy eyes, the only feature that wasn't changing on that shifting face, watched me with detached satisfaction.

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Navar4477 t1_jai8ook wrote

This mirrored my initial thoughts, very good work!

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purduephotog t1_jajx9nv wrote

>I laughed because the truth was too much to bear. Gunshots rang loudly in my ears, and my chest suddenly burned. I slumped back, my eyes bulging out as I found myself unable to draw breath. The monster's icy eyes, the only feature that wasn't changing on that shifting face, watched me with detached satisfaction.

I... wish the bullets had bounced... and instead slaughtered Universal Man. The True Immunity.

...retcon coming... ;-) unfortunately I have no talent. I'm useless but for a donator of $$ to those that do. My lot in life, ya know?

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EchoNeko t1_jaku6lm wrote

Gunshots rang loudly in my ears as I flinched, expecting any moment to be my last. Nothing happened, and after what seemed like an eternity, I raised my head. The gun was still smoking, and Universal Man was staring at me with a mixture of hatred and shock. He fired again and again, until the clicking of the empty cartridge filled the space. None of the bullets hit, always whizzing by my head, so close I could feel my hair moving. Even when I flinched in the wrong direction, they missed.

"HOW IS THIS POSSIBLE?!" Universal Man bellowed, standing up so suddenly that he sent his chair flying. The metal of the gun screeched as he closed his fist around it, crushing it. "YOU SHOULD BE DEAD! I CANNOT MISS! IT'S ONE OF MY POWERS!"

The truth dawned on me then. One of his powers. "You've made a big mistake, then. I'm immune to any power that altars anything about me. Obviously, that includes my natural lifespan. I'm immune to your perfect aim." I stood, and though my heart was racing, I was no longer afraid. "Now, as pleasant as it was to meet you, I'm afraid you're no longer welcome in my home. Leave." Without another word, I turned back to my room. I had some security recordings to upload to the Internet.

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purduephotog t1_jasa4hu wrote

upload to Youtube.

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AWESOME. I can see this being the ... super heros hunting their own because, well, he's super :)

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Necessary-Degree-531 t1_jalsi5i wrote

so uh minor gripe with this... if the idea is that if you're immune to Universal Man's powers he can't sap life from you so you're eternal because he's the source of aging, ergo people don't naturally age, which is contradicted by his power being to take from others' powers and lifespans, because lifespans shouldn't exist if aging doesn't exist.

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andrius-b t1_jam7h63 wrote

I hear you. Maybe the backstory could be that people aren't immortal but are meant to have Biblical lifespans of 900+ years like Methuselah.

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InfiniteEnergy_ t1_jd26xdg wrote

It could be that he takes their energy and that results in slowly killing them which is interpreted as a lifespan. slowly killing and aging would be the same thing.

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