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chacham2 OP t1_jd92kf9 wrote

Thank you.

I like the approach in your story. I'd prefer elaboration instead of a story with a surprise sacrifice, where we don't even get to see the result. To me, this is kind of an outline. A good outline though. Thank you for the story!

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Ezkiri t1_jdatefg wrote

I think it’s perfect as a short story, kept me guessing till the end maybe cuz I’m dumb lol and the reveal was succinct without need for elaboration.

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chacham2 OP t1_jdaza1h wrote

Fair enough. Vive la dif·fé·rence!

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