ApocalypseOwl t1_jegg8xg wrote
Reply to comment by ApocalypseOwl in [WP] In the afterlife, you are given a choice of 7 gates to pass through and indulge in a deadly sin for the rest of eternity, but one in particular catches your eye; a rusty office door labelled "PRIDE" in bold font. by DragonEyeNinja
Ancient eyes look at me. ''So, you've come.'' I nod. Of course I've come. ''You must understand, that this isn't the secret correct door, which leads to the real paradise.'' I roll my eyes, of course it isn't. I'm not an imbecile who'd think that they could get one over on the masses simply by taking the least popular choice. ''This is Pride. An eternity in Pride is an eternity where you will work for your glory. You will not have rest, or feasts, or battles for the sake of battles. This is not a place of pleasure or revenge.'' I tap my foot impatiently against the black marble floor. ''You will be cast into a billion worlds, born anew without your memories as a fresh perspective, and you will have to earn glory, crowns, power, and PRIDE. This you will always do, for you are bound by what you are, full of unlimited ambition, and an arrogance the likes of which mortal men can rarely know.'' Now that sounds actually fairly equitable. There will be victories, there will be defeats. But always, there will be unstoppable Pride. Unstoppable determination to win. When the other souls grow bored or mad with their choices, I will live in fame and infamy through eternity. ''It is not a blessing, nor a curse. It simply is. When a billion lives are over, when eternity is at its end, you will return here and remember all that you have earned. Every victory won, every ambition fulfilled, every glory taken.''
''And then what, do I become god?'' I ask in jest. The angel, weathered, tired, and ancient, sighs. ''No. Not really. Once that is over, you will be given the choice to return for another billion lives of adventure and glory, or to become the mind-seed for a new universe. You will become the amaranthine dream of a new reality that shall bring forth its own adventures, own tragedies, own afterlife which might make more sense than our current set-up. You will become everything; everything will become you.'' I shrug. Makes slightly better sense than the traditional ideas about heaven and hell in any case. Doesn't actually sound all that bad, now that I come to think of it, this eternity of Pride. I smile, as I consider the grandeur of this task. A billion lives, and countless new wondrous and terrible experiences. Let it be so. ''Alright you decrepit withered angel, let's get to it. Send me to a new world, where I shall do my utmost to conquer in whatever possible form I can! Let a billion lifetimes of adventure and wonder begin.''
He nods, the creaking bones of his wings flutter. ''Not many dare to make that choice. Behind every door of the seven sins, there is an eternity that will make you happy. Pride is the only door that has an ending though. None in the other sin-realms are mad, brave, or arrogant enough to end. Only the truly proud dares to seek an ending.'' I nod as he begins casting whatever angelic magic that will send me onwards into adventure. ''There must be an ending to the legend, otherwise, the bards and storytellers won't ever speak of it. Eternity is never desirable. It is not the hallmarks of any story I would ever want to hear.''
evilhakoora t1_jegk5vv wrote
Very nice! Brilliant . Can be made into a short novel, where you describe some of the billions lives he lives
JackTheJackerJacket t1_jegqlro wrote
Plot twist he simply becomes every significant Historical Figure in World History.
He becomes Alexander The Great He becomes Genghis Khan He becomes George Washington He becomes King Henry VIII He becomes Napoleon He becomes any of the Tsars of Russia He becomes Agamemnon of Greece He becomes any one of the grave robbed God-Kings of Egypt. Not Tutakamun, since he was only preserved because he was hidden as a disgrace. He becomes Adolf Hitler and King Leopold II pride doesn't mean you are good. He becomes Emperor of Japan He becomes Cao Cao, leader of the Wei Dynasty, Ancient China.
He becomes Joan of Arc. He becomes Mulan He becomes Blackbeard He becomes Xerces of Persia.
evilhakoora t1_jegtszk wrote
lol, you should look into the Writing Prompt I submitted here today. ( Pretty please, no one has submitted nay stories yet)
Draynrha t1_jeguo9s wrote
What a good read! Thank you for giving me the pleasure to read such a story. It's precise, concise and well within the given prompt but it gives you the impression you've been there and came back to tell us about it.
SnappingTurt3ls t1_jegtqox wrote
This gave me the chills. I love it! 🏅
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