DistinguishedSloth t1_je4m5zx wrote on March 29, 2023 at 11:42 AM

Reply to comment by Roll_a_new_life in [WP] You, a supervillain, are very confused as to why your superhero-nemesis is rampaging through your lair screaming something about you kidnapping their girlfriend. Meanwhile your daughter, who has come to visit you, seems very nervous and is anxious to leave your lair. by Kitty_Fuchs

I think you’ve hit the nail on the head there. Yeah that would have been a much more interesting avenue to explore ngl lol. ‘The good guys are bad’ trope is getting played out but I can see now I definitely hinted toward it being the case - so I basically promised the readers that the superhero isn’t all that good but then I didn’t deliver on it. That sucks. I wanna re-write it now. Would you be interested in reading an alternative version?

Roll_a_new_life t1_je4xk9w wrote on March 29, 2023 at 1:21 PM

I think there were hints, not a promise. Valiant instantly stops fighting back, which is not something a raging abuser does on the word of their partner. I think you'd just need to explain it away with like... she has a piece of tech or something on her that alerts to villains. Then she's suspicious and confused, Executioner is confused and alarmed, and Valiant jumps into action.

But yeah, I would like to read more! I don't think you really need a rewrite, even, but you know best. It's really tragic, I can believe that no one is going to try to help her, or even believe her, except Executioner... and Valiant has very good reason to keep her away. You could absolutely wreck my entire day, lol.