Hey Ginger!

I honestly thought you were leading up to Lin being the secret killer all along. She killed these people and then does actually have the power to control them to throw off the police. And that's not even a critique, I loved the twist that you actually went for.

I also think you did a great job with just the complete frustration here. I mean, I was annoyed just hearing the guy talk, forget actually having to deal with him, haha.

Really well done.

I do just have a few bits and bobs for you though,

> The detective whirled wide-eyed to the medium.

So this bit didn't exactly sit right with me. Why was he so surprised or annoyed? I mean, sure, the answer was dumb but did he honestly expect to get a genuine answer here? I'd expect him to groan or storm out, but whirl around in surprise?

> After the door slammed shut, Lin gazed from her clashing,

I just wanted something more here to indicate the perspective change. A line break could work but not sure. Up to you though.

One final thing, I understand one victim acting this way but nine? Why would they all react like this? Seems maybe a bit unrealistic. But that could just be me misunderstanding.

I hope this helps.

Good Words!