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galdu t1_jcc2uam wrote

Thanks for sharing this spooky tale!

I really liked this stuff:

  • Using the necklace to help us understand the characters. As well as using it to heighten the intensity of the scene.
  • The way you described what Button was hearing on the phone. In a small amount of words you were able to give a distinctive sound to it.
  • The way the monster was described. Both ambiguous and specific, allowing the reader to imagine whatever springs to mind.

Thing(s) that didn't connect with me:

  • The framing backstory is a little confusing. Is Button looking for two missing people or are they looking for Jack? Same thing?
  • The recollection of what the boss said interrupted a part of scene that I wanted to be more engrossed in.
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