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chacham2 OP t1_itm28p3 wrote

Reply to comment by Crystal1501 in [WP] You wake up disoriented when offered some rags to cover your naked body. Eventually, you remember you were king. A coup used an arcane spell to change your looks and displace you, leaving only your family's birthmark. People assume you are dead, but the new ruler is still looking to kill you. by chacham2

Thank you for the interesting reply! I can't say i like the warper, but the first part definitely had my interest.

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Crystal1501 t1_itm2hnw wrote

You misunderstand slightly. Warper is a former villain who started something where people can go to him for help to locate to a new area. It's all explained in my series.

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chacham2 OP t1_itm39ax wrote

Ah. I see.

I just didn't like that part of the story. But that is a really interesting idea.

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Crystal1501 t1_itm3sjo wrote

What didn't you like about it?

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chacham2 OP t1_itm4c3g wrote

That the king gave up. Also, that's some random individual seem to know everything about the tattoo and believe him right away. Being you're writing a series about the other character, that actually makes quite a bit of sense. I was looking for a story about the king though. So, i guess the reason i don't like it is that i'm biased. :)

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Crystal1501 t1_itm581z wrote

I did my best to explain everything lol, maybe I could make it a bit clearer...

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chacham2 OP t1_itm67lw wrote

You said it was part of the series, you made it quite clear. I don't mean to insult, i just didn't like the series, i guess. Regardless, i liked the setup. That part got me engaged.

The thrust of my reply was to compliment you for that first part. :)

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Crystal1501 t1_itm6glc wrote

No I get that. And when I said 'explain', I meant make the reasonings in the story clearer. I edited the story slightly to hopefully make it more obvious how and why certain things work lol.

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chacham2 OP t1_itm8bob wrote

Oh, cool. That is pretty neat!

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Crystal1501 t1_itm8j4d wrote

Anyway, even if you didn't care for the second half, I'm glad you liked the first half at least!

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