GhostOfNaturEstuary OP t1_iug3nmq wrote on October 31, 2022 at 1:32 AM

Reply to comment by armageddon_20xx in [WP] If it wasn’t the other side the chicken wished to get to, then what was it about the road which needed crossing? by GhostOfNaturEstuary

I enjoyed the prison like escape and flee from poverty in an imagery of flying ones coop. My favorite most magical line of yours was “Looking upward, she saw trillions of stars twinkling at her as if affirming her destiny to reach beyond her confines!” Also as soon as she escapes the dose of reality requiring a fight for one’s survival is an impactful lesson taught in the story. The chase across the road I pictured as a game of frogger between Fox and Chicken! The fact her passion for the promised land led her to the other side of a road she may have not wished for yet soon discovered was the “uninterrupted freedom” she dreamed of is mind blowing! Love how you wrote this!

armageddon_20xx t1_iug4uru wrote on October 31, 2022 at 1:41 AM

Thanks! I'm quite happy with this piece, it is definitely one of my better-written ones.

GhostOfNaturEstuary OP t1_iug6ais wrote on October 31, 2022 at 1:52 AM

Of course, I appreciate the creativity shared here. Kind of bummed it was removed cause of a simple question/simple answer rule. I’m fairly new here, so I wonder how it could be worded as a writing prompt with the same premise. “You, a chicken, do not wish to get to the other side of the road, yet somehow find yourself crossing it”