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Ataraxidermist t1_iycz34m wrote

Reply to comment by IvoMiata in [WP] Your wife has an estranged sister that you have never met. She was murdered in a cold case soon after you were married. You brush off your wife’s new strange behaviour after the murder as grief. Until you find an old family photo of your wife as a kid, you shiver as you realise… they’re twins. by AUFunmacy

Good idea and great way to finish the short with that sentence at the back of the photo. it would have had a greater effect if the story had been a tad longer, for the buildup. But that's really polishing, it's a nice start.

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IvoMiata t1_iyd47he wrote

Thank you for the suggestion! I kept it short because I thought that longer could spoil the finale!
Will keep it in mind if I ever try again!

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