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Laverniones t1_iy9rdzf wrote

“Can someone explain to me how in the seven hells does someone trip over banana peel, fall in 10 cm deep river and whats the most unbelievable is that victim died of suffocation with water inside lungs?. I asked ‘am I in some sort of book or something. I know for sure that no one can be so stupid… sigh I hate my job.’

While I was looking for clues my apprentice was interrogating witnesses. But he’s new in business so I got to watch over him so any mistakes are avoided. Of course he made mistake so i switched with him in perfect moment, my fame as “Best Detective with no flaws” will be maintained.

-”Phillip I think that all clues are found but I would like you to check again In case something was overlooked.” -”alright teacher” My cute apprentice looked at me apologetically. Of course he knew his mistake. Well coming back to witnes. -”would you like to add anything to your testimony?” I asked. -” Nnn…o. No!” face of the witness took white color and had droplets of sweat coming from forehead. I glared with suspicion at actions of “innocent” witness And saw that he had smirk that was telling you’ll never know that I did it. ‘alright in many years of my detective career i would never suspect asking that question but… -” Did you kill that person with banana peel?” -”How did you kn… I ment no!” ‘sigh am I really in the book? I can’t belive the stupidity of those people or rather I should call them walking circus. People can’t be that stupid right?’ -”alright we have our suspect lock him up”

My second time writing something except school stuff so constructive criticism will be appreciated.

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kaiob921 OP t1_iy9whkw wrote

I really like the way that it flowed.

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