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Rupertfroggington t1_ixdljc6 wrote

The rain throws itself like clumps of sand against the waiting room’s windows. It comes in waves, as if there’s a giant the other side thrumming their fingers on the glass.

The girl squeaks open the door and squeezes through. Her pink hair’s pasted by the rain onto her forehead and neck, like melted cotton candy.

I nod to welcome her.

She puffs out a breath of steam. “Hey.”

She sits two benches away from me. There’s no one else here tonight. She shivers. Tries not to, to hide her feelings, but it’s cold in here and she’s soaking.

I’m not a gentleman, or even close, but I remove my jacket and throw it next to her. “It makes a good towel.” If there was anything better in the bag at my feet, I’d give it to her.

“No thanks,” she says.

Stubborn. Defiant. “Suit yourself.”

”When’s the next train due?” she asks. She mustn’t have seen the overgrowth strangling the station, the twisted-spines of the railway track. It is dark, the moon and stars swallowed by clouds — easy to miss the dilapidation. She wouldn’t have asked if she had seen any of it.

And yet, a train will come.

”Not until the morning.”

She shivers again.

“Use it,” I say. “You won’t owe me anything for it. I’m not your stepfather.“

She looks at me, wide eyed, two twitchy turquoise pools. Doesn’t say anything though — it could just be a lucky guess on my part, after all. She takes my cotton jacket and dries her hair, looks like a bird who has shaken itself after a bath. She covers a yawn.

“It’ll be a long night yet,” I say. “You might want a little rest. I always think clearer after a good night’s rest. Everything looks better the next morning, don’t you think?”

“Why are you here if there’s no train until tomorrow?”

”In case anyone comes here.“

She frowns. ”So… You work here?”

“No.”

”Then why are you—”

She sees the blood on the cotton jacket. Looks at me, searching for a wound, hoping to find one. Then, when she fails, she reaches up and touches her own head.

”What the hell? What the hell?”

Now it’s fear causing her to shiver.

“You wanted to know why I’m here. It’s because I don’t believe anyone should be alone before their journey,” I say.

Her hand is covered in blood. Her pool of memories, leaked empty for a time, are refilling.

”He will be punished, if that’s of any comfort. I promise you that. And I will make sure he does not get to ride this train.”

She gasps at her thoughts. At the violence she’s recalling.

She is fifteen. She will never be older.

“You knew,” she whispers. “What are you?”

”A friend. And you are safe in my home.”

She looks around. The rain taps taps taps.

Only the sound of rain for a long while.

”You live here?”

”You should rest,” I say. “The bleeding has stopped. The rain made it run, that’s all. You’re safe now.”

”Am I…”

”Yes.”

”Oh.”

She says nothing else. Doesn’t cry. Just thinks.

Yawns, eventually.

When she finally sleeps, jacket balled beneath her head, I walk over to her with my bag. It is not the same teddy bear her real father had given her, that she lost when she was nine, but it looks the same. If I could leave this room, I would find the original for her. As it is, this is the best I can manage.

I tuck it into the nook of her elbow.

One is never too old for such comfort.

I return to my seat and wait for the storm to pass, for the pale light of the morning train that will take her to the place beyond.

And I will wait, as always, for the next lost soul.

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Rango_____ t1_ixdq26h wrote

Do you have a subreddit for your own writing that has extra parts to this? This is amazing, so much so that I was sad when I got to the next post. If you have time I suggest you add more! Brilliant! Talent at it's finest!

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Rupertfroggington t1_ixe65zk wrote

Thanks, that‘s really kind of you! I do have a subreddit but it’s not got any more of this story (and hasn’t been updated in a while) so I won’t link — but I appreciate you asking <3

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Rango_____ t1_ixekb5e wrote

Aww. That's unfortunate. You have real skill though!

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TheDarkAngel135790 t1_ixfnvfo wrote

I hope you don't mind me snooping through your post history and finding your subreddit... Will delete this comment if you say so

It's r/FroggingtonsPond, guys

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Kazlanne t1_ixh2tf6 wrote

I joined it, just in case they return. Absolutely loved this, and their writing style.

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Willowrosephoenix t1_ixex5mr wrote

This made me cry. Please don’t apologize. It’s beautiful. At 14, my own biological father made me destroy all my plush animals. Do you believe in magic? A few years ago, my partner found an Etsy listing for a plush like my favorite one. When it arrived, Lamby still had the rip on his front left leg. I don’t know how it’s the same one, but he is.

I survived my upbringing. But a part of me didn’t. If that part of me sat in a station like the one here (I imagine there are many), it is nice to know there was a compassionate guide there to ease the way.

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CloudyTheDucky t1_ixf9yw9 wrote

> She is fifteen. She will never be older

God that line hits so hard, your writing is amazing

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PugPockets t1_ixg83zn wrote

It really did, I reread that line a few times. It seems banal because you know at that point, but it’s really sad and gorgeous.

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xDRAKONx t1_ixewpfp wrote

Beautifully written. There’s something about this style that just captures you. I knew what was happening and I still wanted to know what was next

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dravas t1_ixfi44i wrote

Like the version of sandmans death. There to welcome the dead and help them pass.

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Kerinh t1_ixf9oct wrote

This is so good. Sad but can feel a hint of hope

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Doip t1_ixfe5m5 wrote

Totally reminds me of the Dark Haired Teen. Dunno if this link will work, the sub bugged out and has a gibberish name and the guy who wrote it last posted in a suicide prevention sun a year ago.

r/thedarkhairedteen

Okay the bugged name but working sub is www.reddit.com/r/a:t5_34fjb

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NotAMeatPopsicle t1_ixg4gmd wrote

Saw the username, stayed for some literary chicken noodle soup, was not disappointed.

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Jacky1111111 t1_ixhcmgs wrote

Brother you gave me goosebumps, this is beautiful thank you

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