SirPiecemaker t1_iyw0r3t wrote
The young man opened the doors of his study and ushered in the group of far older, distinguished ladies and gentlemen with amicable urgency. The man was a stark contrast to his guests; not only in his age but his attire, too, was far more modest, only wearing a vest as opposed to an elaborate suit or dress.
"Please," he smiled, "I am so glad you all accepted my offer. Do come in."
The group walked in with an air of arrogance and contempt one would expect from nobility or, in this particular case, elder vampires. They sat down in the luxurious leather armchairs prepared for the occasion.
"Very well, Viktor," one of the oldest men said. "What is this all about? We may have all eternity, but not all the patience," he chortled.
"Trust me," Viktor said eagerly, "what I am about to show you will change your lives." He looked expectantly at his guests but when he realized he didn't quite grip their attention yet, nervously continued.
"Up until today," Viktor said, "we have had to rely on a regular intake of human blood to survive. This not only put us in a morally questionable position, it would sometimes endanger our lives and well-being when the human world caught onto our existence - not to mention professional vampire hunters."
"Viktor," one of the women near the front interrupted, "get to the point."
"Y- yes, of course, Miss Cosmescu," he sputtered out. "There is another way."
He reached below his desk and pulled out a leather case containing several syringes. The elders exchanged puzzled looks.
"These are supplements - iron, vitamin D, some designer medications that are not widely available to the human world, but - in short... they remove our dependence on blood. We still need to eat to gain other nutrients and fat but we will no longer need-"
His eager, enthusiastic presentation ended when one of the men laughed loudly, soon joined by almost everyone else in the room.
"Is this it, boy?" the man said when he, at last, stopped laughing. "A way to stop drinking blood?"
Viktor seemed confused. "Yes, we will finally be able to live peacefully with-"
"The cattle?" a woman interrupted. "Why do you think we possibly care about them?"
"They're intelligent beings like we are," Viktor protested. "We have no right-"
"No, boy, we do have the right," another man interrupted. "We are inherently superior. We take what we want. I will not stoop to the level of injecting myself with some trash just to spare the lives of the worms who writhe in the dirt."
"Please, if you would just consider-"
"If this is all, boy," the man interrupted again, "you have wasted enough of our time."
He started standing up, but Viktor raised his hands. "Please! There is... one more thing. Just a minute more of your time, I beg of you!"
The elders sighed collectively but sat back down.
"You are on thin ice, boy," the man hissed.
"I- I'll just need to gather a few items. Please, I will be right back. Claudia," he said and turned to one of the younger handmaidens standing meekly in the corner, "if you would please help me?"
He stepped out of the room together with the woman before sliding the doors shut. He sighed and rested his head against the door itself in defeat.
"Viktor?" Claudia asked. He looked at her with a weak smile, but then narrowed his eyes and his smile grew wider, happier.
"Your eyes... you... you took the supplements," he gasped. She smiled and nodded.
"I saw the Sun today, Viktor," she breathed quietly. "I saw the Sun."
"Did it meet your expectations?"
"I..." she said, but left her mouth open, incapable of describing her feelings, yet the tears that welled up in her eyes told more than enough.
Viktor smiled before slumping back into a defeated slouch as he walked to a panel beside the door and pressed several buttons. A metallic click rumbled the doors, followed by a spooling, rising whoosh of electricity within the room.
"What are you doing?" Claudia asked. Viktor did not turn to face her. He couldn't.
He pressed another button.
A loud, electric buzzing filled the study, a streak of ultraviolet light escaping it just at the threshold of the door. Screaming filled the room, followed by the sickening smell of burning flesh.
Claudia screamed and grabbed Viktor by the shoulder.
"VIKTOR! WHAT DID YOU DO?"
He looked at her somberly.
"They- they left me no choice. I promised I'd change their lives today," he said. "And I keep my promises."
DanTheMan827 t1_iyw2est wrote
Talk about being enlightened
Mystery-Magic t1_iyw6hlq wrote
LoL
Adorable-Practice872 t1_j00s8bc wrote
👏 👏 👏
l23VIVE t1_iyw4skw wrote
Love it, if the old refuse to adapt they must be brushed aside!
Empty_Vegetable4381 t1_iyydy3j wrote
Quite literally with the clean up of ashes 😅
TwilightVulpine t1_iyyvx5p wrote
Bigwig vampire lady finds out it's not so fun when her life gets casually tossed aside eh?
LoopyChew t1_iyx8m8l wrote
NGL, while I enjoyed the actual twist, I was hoping it would turn into a vampire MLM supplement scheme.
seal_eggs t1_iyzh3ek wrote
Write that one. It sounds fun
Superben14 OP t1_iyw2ktp wrote
Awesome story!
TBTapion t1_iyxgmdx wrote
Loved this!
And call my imagination cliché, but I could see this turn into some old-gen vs new-gen vampire in-fighting with the vampire hunters involving themselves.
RedTango68 t1_iyzaqtx wrote
Look up the teenagers book series: cirque du freak to have vampire vs vampire battles. Would recommend the books over the movies 100p
nametakenfan t1_iyw8tro wrote
Absolutely amazing! I love that ending - the recognition that when people tell you they won't change you should take them at their word
theradomeaser t1_iyyiqlw wrote
This story is even better when you know blood is stupidly ineffective to get your nutrients. Seriously just eat the humans blood included no need to suck them
Dr_CSS t1_iyxd2ui wrote
Story was exactly as I expected, excellent
sincethenes t1_iyxuxxx wrote
This reads like the ending of the old CYOA stories, and I mean that in the best way possible.
noughtnaut t1_iyzhjld wrote
I'm no writer; I only had one measly angle on this, and it was different than yours. Perhaps, in a future variation, it might be incorporated as a penultimate enticement for the elders?
Seeing the sun is marvellous, and also does wonders for one's general mental disposition. But to be in the sun is to be seen by others. Now, I don't presume to call a fellow vampire vain but, as a whole, we do appreciate proper appearance. Yes, I know, we all have the means and inclination of keeping handmaidens, but what I'm getting at is, this tincture finally allows us to make use of mirrors.
SirPiecemaker t1_iyzoakh wrote
Only if you're using old mirrors that contain silver to reflect - modern ones do not and would serve well for vampires.
Not to mention that the stubborn bastards would keep drinking humans; the main thing our protagonist takes issue with.
fearlessalphabet t1_iyzw2n8 wrote
Cool story and I like your writing! One nitpick is maybe Viktor could have stayed in the room when he turned on the UV light? Since both him and his assistant took the supplement so sunlight (UV) light wouldn't hurt them. Maybe this will make the ending a little more dramatic!
SirPiecemaker t1_iz02bmn wrote
Definitely a cool idea, but I wanted to work in Claudia being shocked by her experience of seeing the Sun - had Viktor killed them right away, she wouldn't get a chance to.
Looxond t1_iz0qbq8 wrote
part 2?
SirPiecemaker t1_iz0vl4g wrote
Hate to disappoint, but I rarely do second parts. Perhaps you'd enjoy my other stories, however?
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