InkDiamond t1_j0swvfb wrote on December 19, 2022 at 4:05 AM

Reply to comment by ForwardCrow9291 in [WP] Teddy Roosevelt has woken with superpowers in a dystopian world ruled by monopolies, it is time to bust these trusts by force! by Janus-Moth

I also thought this was funny. There are a lot of good shots in here.

I would be wary of sentence length though. Sometimes the story was slightly hard to understand because there was just so much info in a given sentence. Starting off paragraphs with bite-sized sentences will make the writing flow better