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that_one_author t1_j5r39is wrote

Omni-man vs Superman

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f---thezodiac OP t1_j5rht3m wrote

(I'm not caught up with Invincible, but I'll try my best)

As Omni-man was surveying the arctic, he saw a weird snow structure that seemed interesting. As he approached, he saw the large doors open to reveal a man with a weird red blue and yellow uniform. "Well hello there, who might you be?" Superman asked. "You don't know? I'm Omni-man, superhero, savior of the world, never heard of me?" Superman was perplexed, but realized he had been in far weirder circumstances, he played along, "ok Omni-man, I'm also a hero. Why don't you show me what you can do." He said before levitating above the ground.

The two clashed in mid-air, battling for dominance before Omni-man broke off underneath the man of steel and threw him to the ground. He launched a flurry of attacks before Superman froze him with his breath.

Superman took a second to admire Omni-man's physique with his X-ray vision, which was unlike anything he had every seen. As he looked, he saw the ice crack and break as Omni-man was freed.

The two fought ferociously, one earth shattering hit after another, before Superman started realizing a trend. Every time the ice crackled from the air pressure generated by the attacks, Omni-man winced. So when Superman decided the games were over, he started creating sonic claps to damage Omni-man.

After only a few seconds, Superman took his victory.

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that_one_author t1_j5rjxba wrote

I recommend finishing the show, then rewriting. Superman doesn’t win so easy. Fun fight tho.

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f---thezodiac OP t1_j5rlhsp wrote

I will, also I appreciate the feedback, I really need practice writing fight scenes that seem more balanced, so any suggestions are welcome

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that_one_author t1_j5rnufi wrote

Well, suggestions I have.

Fight scenes are made of 3 things.

Characters, motive, and setting.

Your characters and their abilities, be it training or weapons or superpowers, these should be consistent and used during the fight.

Motive, people don’t fight for no reason, why people fight is the difference between something people want to skip and something that draws people to the edge of their seat.

setting. True professionals and panicked citizens alike will try and use their environment to their advantage. Imagine where your characters are fighting and what is around them. Utilizing what you “see” makes fights not only more interesting but more engaging, as it can be unexpected. I.e. in a playground and wrapping the chain of a swing around a neck, or stomping on the seesaw, etc…

This will extend your fight scene but it’s not all of it. I like to watch the fight in my mind as if it is a well choreographed movie or anime, then describe each hit, the sounds sights smells the feeling of a face smashed into snow and rocks and blood pours from the broken nose, the Pain of each strike and, as a bonus that’s only available in writing, the thoughts of the participants In real time.

choose one or 2 of these things to focus on and go from there.

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