Submitted by L_sigh_kangeroo t3_123no3c in books

So I’m much more of a movie or show person, and I love analyzing them, but I’ve been looking to get back into reading because I want to expand my taste for good writing. I’ve been reading horror and thriller books for now to ease my way back in. I will be as brief as I can with this.

My problems with Verity summed up:

The book hits a point where it becomes formulaic and sort of drag to get through. I think its around the time Lowen and Jeremy have one of their first really intimate moments and we know they’re bound to sleep together. At this time Lowen starts to get a bit bored with the manuscript.

All the sex gets a bit heavy-handed and detracts from the book after a while. It starts to feel less like a spicy romance thriller and more like cheap erotica for horny women.

In general, there was a lack of subtext throughout the book. I don’t wanna get too much into that and risk sounding like a snob.

Finally, the ending. Holy cow was the ending bad. No matter which of the 3 scenarios you believe to be true (Jeremy being the psycho that plotted everything, team letter, team manuscript) there are holes and ridiculous decisions made by characters all around. If you’re team letter, why the actual fuck would you not write “this is a writing EXERCISE” on the manuscript? Why the fuck would you hide the letter in the fucking floor of all places whether you want the letter to be found by Jeremy or Lowen? Amnesia to conveniently forget certain plot points is a HUGE writing sin as well. Why would Jeremy trust Verity around Crew at ALL if he suspected something like that?

If you think the manuscript was real, why the absolute fuck would you write a 15 chapter detailed confession to one of the most horrific crimes one could commit? I understand she’s a writer and suspension of disbelief and all that, but I can only suspend my disbelief so much. There are also cheap open-ended plot points like Crew cutting his chin, the basement stuff being rummaged through, and whether or not Jeremy had read the manuscript before. The letter in general just felt like cheap attempt to make things open-ended in a super contrived way.

What I liked:

I’ve seen people complain about the lack of characterization, which doesnt make a ton of sense to me. Do you guys mean specifically how the characters look? Because in terms of personalities, the characterization was pretty great.

I enjoyed the setup and buildup for much of the book thanks to Hoover’s writing style. Its quick, descriptive when it needs to be, and watching the characters interact differently with one another is pretty intriguing.

Scary elements. There were some pretty creepy/scary moments sprinkled throughout the book that were actually impressive. Verity following Lowen with her eyes from the balcony, Verity appearing at the top of the staircase, Crew waving to the empty window, Crew cutting his chin on a knife that isnt there, and some of the child abuse scenes, while graphic, did give me the chills. I also think big chunks of the manuscript were pretty convincing in terms of Verity’s supposed inner thoughts. There are women out there that are fucked up in the head and get jealous of their children.

In general, there was a fun and interesting thriller/mystery to read through for about 70% of the book. Colleen Hoover definitely has writing chops when it comes to building an interesting scene efficiently and keeping readers guessing. But the last act of this book feels so weak and cheap that it left a bad taste in my mouth.

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TauriesStella t1_jdvmtep wrote

I'm team letter, and also can understand why Verity wouldn't write "exercise practice" on it. I like to dabble with my own dark drabbles when I want to get into the head/mindset of a villain. The thought of marking it as an exercise never crosses my mind because no one ever digs through my belongings, and I trust them not to do so. Verity does establish in her manuscript that Jeremy doesn't read her stories and she already trusts him a lot.

It's also a writer's thing to print out manuscripts so they can look at it through a fresh lense. Another trick you may see from writers is changing their font, but printing is considered the standard. Although, I do want to add... Mine and Verity's practices, while similar, are not the same. I stay very clear from real life people and settings.

With the letter being in the floor boards... I always assumed that was meant to be an endgame move. As in, Verity would take it out once she was ready for it to be found and she wasn't expecting it to end as it had.

I do agree with your other points, though! The book needed a bit more refining, I think, but it's still an enjoyable read for the most part.

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L_sigh_kangeroo OP t1_jdvvwl2 wrote

Ahh okay. I guess from a Writer’s POV that helps a bit. I still think it was a strange thing to do after your child died, and I know it can be chalked up to a writer’s creative process and own grieving process but it still felt all too convenient to me though.

I appreciate the response!!

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StellaAI t1_jdwa3bo wrote

As a criticism of your criticism, wanting subtext does not make you a "snob". People read for all different reasons and wanting to hear a deeper story is a valid one. Quite a few readers here and everywhere else would agree with you.

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>All the sex gets a bit heavy-handed and detracts from the book after a
while. It starts to feel less like a spicy romance thriller and more
like cheap erotica for horny women.

You really hit the nail on the head. In defense of Hoover, she intimately knows her market.

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L_sigh_kangeroo OP t1_jdwzjg4 wrote

There’s something about the scene to scene writing that I actually enjoy. I cant put my finger on it but i thoroughly enjoyed the whole first sequence with the car accident leading up to the contract meeting. It was brisk and engaging

I think in terms of overall narrative I do have issues though

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