Contentiblereddit t1_irv1b2z wrote on October 11, 2022 at 6:49 AM

Reply to comment by DoctorWaluigiTime in Does the writing improve in later entries in the Dresden Files? by ChipsAhoiMcCoy

You mean after he >!let's her strip totally nude, confirms her body piercings, and get on her knees in front of him? There was absolutely no way he could have shut that down sooner?!<

DoctorWaluigiTime t1_irvgqff wrote on October 11, 2022 at 10:37 AM

Correct. In the circumstances it was the only way to get it out of her system, as it were.

There's also just the general issue of it being first person narration, where the only way we're getting any description of anything is via the main character's PoV.

Contentiblereddit t1_irvhowa wrote on October 11, 2022 at 10:49 AM

That's absolutely BS. If you can't think of a way to >!shut down a vulnerable teenage girl you might as well have been grooming before she gets naked, then you didn't want to shut it down.!<

fliponymousredux t1_irwlaj9 wrote on October 11, 2022 at 4:11 PM

He needed her to be absolutely certain she'd taken her absolutely best shot, no wiggle room, no "maybe if I'd tried harder". If he'd shut it down sooner she'd think she might still somehow have a chance.