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GenericOnlineName OP t1_istwxjs wrote
Thank you so much! :)
Nixplosion t1_isu60ee wrote
If I were you I'd expand on this idea into a short horror story or something!
Better yet!
A webcomic series or a book! You really have something here. You should consider expanding this idea beyond four panels!
GenericOnlineName OP t1_isu6mvo wrote
I have a handful of stories that I could make into longer narratives. I like to sample bits of them for these inktober comics. Usually I dip into my inspiration and take a segment for a smaller story.
But eventually I'll expand these into longer narratives. :)
Nixplosion t1_isu6z0n wrote
Please do! I'd be excited to read more of it!
GiovanniBezerra t1_isx3wgc wrote
Beautiful work.
troistigrestristes t1_isv4g8l wrote
I do like the idea of this being part of a mystery story, and the fact that the girls have long hair being a common point that the reader may not realise before it is revealed in the middle of the story!
Alarid t1_iswfc1b wrote
And then it is all just a misunderstanding and all those girls just keep getting their hair caught in the trees and accidentally tearing their entire head off.
ZookeepergameFit7451 t1_isx38k2 wrote
That explains everything!! Long hair no more!
ZookeepergameFit7451 t1_it0d71n wrote
I know what happened there
dc551589 t1_isufr4p wrote
I love this as small-town lore for a horror story. It also, as a concept, reminds me a bit of Junji Ito. Love it!
GenericOnlineName OP t1_isug1qt wrote
Thank you so much! I always love small town horror. It feels so personal and like an inescapable trap.
Papplenoose t1_isw5t3q wrote
It reminds me of "The Village".... except yours is actually good!
PM_ur_Rump t1_isw8wxb wrote
Says a lot that a three panel comic is better than that whole movie.
Spyko t1_isujpij wrote
reminds me a lot of his face all red, great art !
idobrowsemuch t1_isxgpyp wrote
Damn that was great. Where do you find things like this? I'd love to check out more
Spyko t1_isxixbo wrote
the artist is Emily Carroll, here's her website
azazelsthrowaway t1_isxsczq wrote
Can you help me understand the ending a bit better? I’m feeling really dumb right now
Spyko t1_isy1z3k wrote
that artist like to leave her story up to interpretation (check out "the groom" for a good exemple).
add to that the narrator being unreliable, like when he describes commons forest things as weird and eerie (ie: a tree with leaves looking like women's hand while it's just a common oak) or when he said "we both laughed" but you can clearly see that only the brother is laughing.
it's normal to not understand everything immediately, it's one of the comics goal
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the most popular and common interpretation is that the beast wasn't the wolf they killed but a shape shifting creature (most likely responsible for the strange hole in the forest) that used the fratricide as an opportunity to infiltrate the village by disguising itself as the brother, the narrator come back to the hole he dumped his brother in and realized that he didn't actually killed him, so he is faced with a choice: finish the job, bring the brother's body and expose the doppelganger, being the village's hero a second time, or do what's right, save his brother, expose the doppleganger this way but have to face the consequence of his actions.
another interpretation that have less ground to stand on but that I personally like, is that the brother coming back from the forest isn't real, but it is a manifestation of the narrators (already shown to be unreliable) guilt. See in the beginning of the story the narrator define his "brother" by all the thing he have, and when he came back to the forest after having killed the beast (and his actual brother) all of those things are given to him. the "brother" coming back from the forest is the narrator himself, as when he came back he basically took his brother place and now his guilt make him dissociate something fierce. the line "why won't he turn and look at me" is actually the narrator being unable to look himself in the mirror. As I said this interpretation is less likely (although it does remove any supernatural elements) but I really like it, as potentially farfetched as it is
daworstredditor t1_isyb1fe wrote
this is cool
M0richild t1_isu5w22 wrote
This would be a really interesting concept to explore vanity and how it often leads destruction when going to extreme. Kind of like the hair chapter in Uzumaki.
Akabander t1_iswbni3 wrote
Some of us keep a ponytail because haircuts are a hassle.
Sapphire_Sky_ t1_iswnr69 wrote
But so is washing, drying and combing long hair. Ugh why must life be so difficult?
Ninjegeabey t1_iswz5qa wrote
There's a manga short story called Zansatsu! Ponytail that does something similar. First thing I thought of when I saw this post
daworstredditor t1_isyb0et wrote
dang thats cool
Cambro88 t1_isyb5uz wrote
Absalom, King David’s son in the Bible, dies because his luxurious hair gets caught in a branch while he’s on horseback during battle. His handsomeness is emphasized in the text before that point
Duahsha t1_isuqe3w wrote
This looks like a story Junji Ito would make
writergirljds t1_isutea4 wrote
It is totally giving me The Hanging Balloons vibes
hotsizzler t1_isusvyz wrote
Oh man, so much mystery here. Is it supernatural? A killer? Yeah on head is screaming, but it could be posed like that. Do the trees do it? Or a monster near the trees
A_Random_Lantern t1_isuu6ub wrote
i mean, their eyes are a bright orange
Bismothe-the-Shade t1_isv486g wrote
Fuck two sentence horror, give me 4 panel horror
OMyGodzilla t1_isv4b1u wrote
THE SKELETONS'LL PULL YOUR HAIR. UP BUT NOT OOOOUT
OMGitsJoeMG t1_isvd1ks wrote
Love it!!! So simple but paints such a vivid little short story <3
GenericOnlineName OP t1_isvg074 wrote
Thank you so much :)
Carnivile t1_isxnkk3 wrote
The ponytail killer strikes again.
shanster925 t1_isvycd4 wrote
I love this. It's inspiring me to write a story!
OmegaX123 t1_isw7atp wrote
If you have more tiny tales of terror (or assemble a group who do), you could try to get this as an anthology series on Line/Naver Webtoon and get pretty low-level famous off it.
ijustneedtolurk t1_isw8uzq wrote
I would 100% follow this on webtoon!
LilyGaming t1_iswb326 wrote
I’m intrigued
harum-scarum t1_iswk1yg wrote
Now I feel like I need a haircut! Lol
Cheese-bo-bees t1_iswmvvy wrote
This is lovely! I hope you continue creating!
goldensaur t1_isx2h9a wrote
reminds me of luciferns from fran bow
waiting4thendtocome t1_isxa8uc wrote
Giving me Junji ito vibes but in all the best ways
chefboar7 t1_isuleor wrote
Really awesome idea. Makes me think of a petty ghost
hussiesucks t1_isutj4g wrote
They’re fine.
awesometoaster1337 t1_isuvl30 wrote
Tomboy village
Papplenoose t1_isw5wiu wrote
That was my thought too, those woods look very Village-y
Nuttypower34651 t1_isv6nrt wrote
So cool!
justkozlow t1_isvivlt wrote
Very good starting point/ideas for a comic even if it's just a short one off
GenericOnlineName OP t1_isvklra wrote
Thats the fun of short comics. You sort of give off a glimpse of the world and everything but you don't need to delve into specifics or a huge story.
shot_dunyun1987 t1_isvw6ey wrote
This is awesome
lonely-blue-sheep t1_isw34qr wrote
Ooh I like this
UniversalAdaptor t1_isw42rg wrote
Wow, I can't believe you made a comic about the principal from my middle school
typical83 t1_isw84l8 wrote
Do you have a website? I went to your profile and everything I clicked on I love
GenericOnlineName OP t1_iswew6n wrote
I just have my profiles. :) Everything with Gloomara, you can follow. I'm working on a long term website to put all my stuff on. But Instagram, DeviantArt, ArtStation and Reddit are the ones I post on the most!
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GenericOnlineName OP t1_isy7a7a wrote
It's just Gloomara :)
iRox24 t1_iswgewq wrote
Creppy
Humble_Bullfrog2342 t1_iswmijg wrote
i love this
y0kai t1_iswolvm wrote
I love this! :D so clever
SethGekco t1_iswpo85 wrote
Cool premise. You plan to ever do anything with it?
GenericOnlineName OP t1_iswqfew wrote
Eventually. Right now I just wanna get the rest of my comics done for Inktober!
Idokrm t1_isx04ye wrote
they're just hanging out together in the forest
Lost_Way7698 t1_isx0ic2 wrote
This is a great short
theletter5ix t1_isx65pz wrote
Oh no it’s John Key
--Alastor-- t1_isx901l wrote
This would make a great full story
thisgrantstomb t1_isx9eqz wrote
You can easily flesh this out to a full one shot comic.
ripyourlungsdave t1_isxbsj4 wrote
I love the simplicity of this story. Reminds me of a visual version of r/TwoSentenceHorror.
Great stuff. I'll follow you and hope to see more :)
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Zedrackis t1_isxkvbg wrote
Good art, the plot falls short for me.
BobbyG-68 t1_isxmlun wrote
well done
dragoono t1_isxzhdu wrote
Makes me think of Son of Sam. Girls were cutting their hair short when the murders were happening in an effort to get the target off their backs.
Noobrack t1_it0r8ql wrote
Welp id be dead..SON OF A (jimmy insert stock death noise here)
FlashyEnvironment970 t1_it0x4ge wrote
Ponytail Killer isn’t only in Big Mouth
FlashyEnvironment970 t1_it0x4zr wrote
Ponytail Killer isn’t only in Big Mouth
Lexvian t1_istrzgo wrote
I wonder how long it took them to put the pieces together and realize its only people with long hair that went missing. Amazing comic btw!