While i agree that writing an essay on a philosophical topic, it’s useful to reference the big ideas and their historical proponents and their arguments, philosophy should also be emergent and creative and that People are taking the leap to actually do philosophy themselves i find commendable.

If you find the essay lacking that’s totally fair but you did actually not present an argument on why it was lacking - you just made a snide and elitist remark that did not further the discussion at all.