Submitted by dylancatlow t3_1130u8q in todayilearned
Reply to comment by myeff in TIL that the phrase "It was a dark and stormy night" was the opening line to an actual novel published in 1830, but runs on for another 51 words: "It was a dark and stormy night; the rain fell in torrents — except at occasional intervals, when it was checked by a violent gust of wind which..." by dylancatlow
Not only is the opening 'line' bad, but the book is essentially unreadable. It was written in the style of the time, which was a loose collection of several page long run-on sentences.
I read quite a few books from this era when I was in high school to try to expand my understanding of how the population perceived the world and how that affected common behaviors that have since gone to the wayside. You are absolutely right about the writing style. I was getting marked down for run-on sentences constantly on my assignments because the writing style rubbed off on me. To this day, I still have a habit of writing long, run-on sentences. That, or I overcorrect and end up with short and blunt sentences.
I suspect you've probably heard the Gary Provost quote before but I always think of it when i worry about sentence length. There's nothing wrong with long or short sentences. You just have to vary them. I think English teachers forget that sometimes.
Anyway, for anyone not familiar with the quote...
>This sentence has five words. Here are five more words. Five-word sentences are fine. But several together become monotonous. Listen to what is happening. The writing is getting boring. The sound of it drones. It’s like a stuck record. The ear demands some variety. Now listen. I vary the sentence length, and I create music. Music. The writing sings. It has a pleasant rhythm, a lilt, a harmony. I use short sentences. And I use sentences of medium length. And sometimes, when I am certain the reader is rested, I will engage him with a sentence of considerable length, a sentence that burns with energy and builds with all the impetus of a crescendo, the roll of the drums, the crash of the cymbals–sounds that say listen to this, it is important.
I suspect you've probably read Alexander Pope's similar lesson on writing :-) --
True ease in writing comes from art, not chance,
As those move easiest who have learned to dance.
'Tis not enough no harshness gives offense,
The sound must seem an echo to the sense:
Soft is the strain when Zephyr gently blows,
And the smooth stream in smoother numbers flows;
But when loud surges lash the sounding shore,
The hoarse, rough verse should like the torrent roar;
When Ajax strives some rock's vast weight to throw,
The line too labors, and the words move slow;
Not so, when swift Camilla scours the plain,
Flies o'er the unbending corn, and skims along the main.
Hear how Timotheus' varied lays surprise,
And bid alternate passions fall and rise!
Ah, the joy of English's iambic pentameter.
Or as I used to say when I taught English as a foreign language 'English sounds like Tum-tee-Tum-tee-Tum-tee-Tum.'
I've always hated that, for the five words he just says monotonous things, I get that its hyperbole, but it comes across as disingenuous
Same
I see what you did there. Whether intentional or not.
Thank you for your art.
We wore an onion on our belt and wrote several page long run-on sentences as was the style at the time.
"Gimme 5 bees for a quarter," you'd say
What is that because of the Kaiser?
As was the style at the time.
“I wrote a story that was only one sentence!”
“Oh like the classic ‘for sale: baby shoes, never worn’?”
“No it was about two hundred pages”
Dammit, Jim! I'm a doctor, not a copy editor.
My personal 6-word-story is "He knelt, she gasped, sprinters start."
How about “he knelt, she gasped, the cunnalingus classes had paid off”
The perfect gift for any occasion.
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