Phoenix4235

Phoenix4235 t1_j5rnr2o wrote

Reply to The women in my family give birth differently by EaPAtbp

OP, no disrespect meant, but seriously - why does your family/neighborhood want the umm... family...to continue on and grow? With everyone so traumatized by it, why don't they just decide to take actions to end your bloodline, so to speak?

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Phoenix4235 t1_iy9vhlo wrote

Reply to comment by sufrt in [WP] Your Significant Other has landed a book publishing deal! You're very proud of them, even if you don't actually enjoy their writing. One day, on a whim, you buy an actual copy in a book store. It's nothing like the pages they gave you to read. Nothing. by veriverd

I think what the other commenters are trying to say is that no one would have instantly jumped to that conclusion and felt "terror and fear" and " throw the book on the floor". They would have first thought about things that are much more likely explanations at first, and thought about the other stuff after those didn't pan out, so it really didn't make sense and felt much too far-fetched.

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Phoenix4235 t1_iy9l73b wrote

Reply to comment by Ataraxidermist in [WP] Your Significant Other has landed a book publishing deal! You're very proud of them, even if you don't actually enjoy their writing. One day, on a whim, you buy an actual copy in a book store. It's nothing like the pages they gave you to read. Nothing. by veriverd

Wow - that was a wild ride! Some people may want more, but imho it can take real talent to find the right balance between enough details for closure vs. managing to be suspenseful in very short stories. Yours manages it perfectly, and leaves you with an ominous dread. Very well done!

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