I appreciate the effort, but that is only 1 of the 5 murder points of a cat, and you are interacting directly with the other 4.

Loved the jokes, especially their first mission being killing rats in a dungeon. I'm not a writer so I can't help you much there, but this bit is grammatically awkward.

>At that point their resident tiefling, Breisis, was a scrappy rogue, her village destroyed she had taken up adventuring to get revenge.

You also love commas a lot. I definitely identify with that. I had to make a conscious effort to break up sentences while writing school papers when I realized I would write entire half page paragraphs composed of 2 complete sentences. Consider breaking longer sentences up or varying punctuation to improve the flow.

Be sure to include options to reduce or eliminate hunger rate of the turtle or manipulate other factors like resource gain or research rate. I'm a big fan of survival crafting games, but the sanity feature in Green Hell was simply too much on top of an already complex system. After turning it off I felt like I was able to learn. Sometimes doing a super relaxed playthrough to learn the game is a big help.

The last arc was some pretty shit writing to be honest.

>More cynically, Madeline might have had a bit of help from her parents in crafting the letter.

Could've been a lesson in reaching out to government officials. If Madeline has a question or concern in the future, she already knows to contact someone.

Yup. Love em. They're unique, but not original.